For her Blog Stage 7 my classmate Rebecca Choi wrote
a piece on her blog, Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Happiness, about the
large number of mass shootings in America and the lack of action in Congress to
combat this epidemic.
To start off her article she began
by presenting some cold hard facts about mass shootings in America, citing the
number of mass shootings and deaths as a result in 2015 and noting that no real
move has been made in congress to combat gun violence. I however did notice
some small errors that were a little distracting while I was reading. Rebecca
used the word “alone” 4 times in 3 sentences, not a huge problem, just
something to think about when writing things like this where diction can really
serve to elevate the argument being made.
Then she went on to go into more
detail on some of the shootings from the past year mentioning incidents such
as, San Bernadino, Charleston, Newtown, and finally ended with Orlando. Then
the author questions why the government has yet to make any moves to solving
the gun violence problem in our country.
Then Rebecca cites a statistic from
the New York Post from a poll about people favoring assault weapon ban but also
saying that it probably wouldn’t help, people saying its too easy to buy a bun
and that expanding background checks would help reduce gun violence. I think
stating some real evidence to back up her claims made her argument more solid.
In the last paragraph Rebecca sums
up her article by stating the while there isn’t a clear solution yet, people
should still be looking to make a change to the gun laws.
